The document will Read the passage, which lacks vivid description, strong imagery, and dialogue. Then rewrite
the passage to include description and dialogue in a way that shows Denise is relieved and
joyful.
Passage
Just as the final school bell rang, Ms. Smithers handed Denise the math test. Denise
turned away and flipped it over to reveal the grade, and then she stepped out into
the hallway and closed the door. She felt happy. Denise walked down the school
hallway and out into the afternoon where her mother
was waiting. Denise showed her the test, and her mother was happy too.