Directions: The following paragraph is an example of a student’s paragraph that does not meet all of the expectations of academic writing. While reading the paragraph, annotate what would need to be changed to meet the expectations of academic writing. I think video games are bad for the mental health of kids and teenager. “86% of the parents said their teenagers did spend too much time playing video games”... Kids get addicted to video games, the more children play video games, especially violent video games, the more they argue with parents and the worse grades they have a school. Yet some video games are educational and good for kids because they can learn something. Some adults limit the time their kids spend playing video games, but other don’t. I think is good to limit the time when kids play… for example, playing at night really late is bad because the next day kids are tired for school.

Rewrite the paragraph, sentence by sentence, following the expectations of formal style, objective tone, and the norms and conventions of academic writing. Some words or punctuation might need to be added, changed, or removed to help meet the academic writing expectations.

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