What's the first step for revising a paragraph with run-on sentences?

This was already the answer "the use of academic language creates an angry and disdainful tone. the use of academic language gives the text a serious and instructive tone. the use of words with strong connotative meanings creates a sorrowful tone."

Nachna najanne agan tedho bhanejhai सिता lai राम्रो अक्षर लेख्न आउदैन तर उनी कलम lai दोष दिन्छन्।