Read the passage from an argumentative essay.

"The Columbian Exchange was bad. It had many effects on native peoples. One of these effects was disease. Disease harmed people. It led to death. Some say up to 90 percent of native peoples died.”

How should the passage be revised to create a more formal tone?

Slang terms should be removed.
First-person pronouns should be added.
Simple sentences should be balanced with more complex ones.
Long and complex sentences should be split apart and made shorter.

Americans often speak of their country as one of several large regions.  these regions are cultural units rather than governmental units --  formed by history and geography and shaped by the economics, literature and folkways that all the parts of a region share. what makes one region different from another? a region's multicultural heritage as well as distinct demographic characteristics like age and occupation make regions different and special. within several regions, language is used differently and there are strong dialects. there are also differences in outlook and attitude based on geography. 

Giving women the right to vote was not accomplished by the northwest ordinance. it did, however, make plans for territories to become states, and forbidding slavery in the territory and providing for public education.