You know, one thing that i thought made castillo's memoir so incredibly engaging was that it jumped straight into the middle of the action—the thirsty crew, the mysterious new land full of danger. tyler, why don't you consider shortening your beginning so that you get to the main event a little more quickly?

post your planning document to the discussion board, and identify two areas that you would like feedback on. some examples: is my event clearly stated? have i included too much or too little about the setting? do my beginning and middle fit together well?
read your classmates' planning documents, and provide constructive feedback explaining how they can improve their plans.