Worth 22 points is this business paper good for my school project on writing a business paper? and what grade will i recieve. i will report if anyone goofs off i need to know. here is my paper:

to: hellmann’s
the company, hellmann’s. noroad rd, address , and zip code located in a lot of different places.

dear: hellmann’s the food company

i am probably your biggest fan. that is because of your mayonnaise anyway. but i have an issue with the mayonnaise, it has eggs in it which i am allergic to. it also contains tons of carbohydrates which are bad for everything including your heart, some people even say that a spoon of mayonnaise puts a layer around your heart whether that is true or not i don’t know. however what i do know is that it gets into your arteries and clogs them making it similar to butter, and not brushing your teeth because the plaque gets into your arteries as well as butter. that is where i would by improving the mayonnaise and make it healthier which in terms would get more money for the production. so before you pitch this email out consider my résumé. there are more reasons below in the second paragraphs

here are a few more reasons i think i would be the best person to hire because i would find a way to take most of the carbohydrates out and make it so it does not clog arteries. i would also find a way to take the eggs out and find a substitute for people who are allergic to eggs like me. i could also make the mayonnaise taste the same as the normal stuff does but it would be a lot healthier. therefore people would be able to eat it in large quantities without clogging arteries. but until then, this letter is a complaint letting you know what you should change and how you should hire me. you for your time and have a great christmas season.