What can i do to improve my sentence? : it’s showing emotional appeal and mentioning suffering from the issues presented causing the audience to evoke pity and sympathy; trying to persuade them to see their point of view and feel for them

For starters , explain what is being shown such as the (Emotional Appeal) if your going to state all of this in 1 sentence also include all the information. Use "Audience" instead of "them" so it doesn't sound as repetative it may sound repatative in terms of word choice but bigger subtext will create influx in your sentence.

Explanation:

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The excerpt shows emotional appeal towards one's suffering from ..(include what the issue is) ..  causing the audience to feel pity and sympathy towards (name of person) ; whilst trying to persuade the audience to see their point of view and feel for (name of person) .

which speech are you talking about?

the answer is a)   a sentence of death costs the state "almost three times as much as a sentence of life in prison" (delon 147)