The implied boundary between the audience and the story taking place on stage?

Label the different parts of the stage. downstage stage left audience stage right upstage

What is the effect of narrator's word choice on the tone of this passage? the words "my heart shrank within itself" create a fearful tone. the words "better-omened" set a hopeful tone. the words "wounded his fellow" develop a remorseful tone. the words "struck harsh upon my ears" suggest an irritated tone.

Besides the revisions listed in the paragraph, what else can deepak do to strengthen his paper?