Is this correct grammar? sports illustrated's may article "too brutal or the future? " focuses on mixed-martial arts. if not explain why.

explanation

old disney was more kid oriented as appose to new disney it's more teen oriented.i guess what i'm trying to say is new disney is way more mature and out there then old disney. for instance all you see in new disney is bf/gf drama and old disney it was nothing like that. kids are growing up and as coorpations like disney, nickolden etc they tend to follow what kids follow so they can have more views . therefore   they have inferred   that now days kids want to have relationships and stuff so that's what disney gives them.

the illustration   that would give a reader a clear understanding of the text is a picture of men constructing the frame of a building.the frame is made of iron bars. the text describes the job of blacksmiths'. these were very organised and they had different names: "the driver" and "the heater". the text describes the way in which these men worked ; they worked iron pieces as if they were playing a sport. in fact, the text wants to show the men's skills. the text also puts some emphasis on the use of '' rivets'' in construction. this kind of nails were not always used in the construction of manhattan.

some examples:

"and with an underhand toss he hurled the smoking rivet straight at the catcher, who caught it in mid-air in his catching can." men's skills

"when the driver was ready for a new " the emphasis on the rivet ( special nail used in construction).

" it against a beam to remove any cinders, and jammed it into the waiting hole. " the emphasis on the rivet.