Can someone me edit my assertions, so they become more detailed ?

How does the narrator’s knowledge of his postapocalyptic world in "by the waters of babylon” affect his reactions to the different settings? it motivates him to make up stories about the world and the places he explores. it has caused him to fear the settings outside the hill country, so he tries to avoid them. it forces him to reject what he sees and experiences himself at various locations in the story. it makes him cautious about new settings yet open-minded and critical of what he experiences.

The image of the observation balloons moving across the sunset is created using -no adjectives -few adjectives -many adjectives

Our coach’s idea of food for the entire wrestling team was tiny sandwiches and fruit.