Do you think that this is good for what the teacher asked for please read it and tell me what would you change or not to will give brainliest ​

From what book is this? I think I know but I am not sure.

I think you give a strong point. Toward the end though you seem to repeat what you said in the beginning. You should probably try to backup your statement as well. Make sure to have a strong claim and reasoning and maybe add some Evidence. I like how you used the dynamic characters and tool them into comparison as well. Hope this helps :)

your eyes are the first things that you open