In three sentences, critique the following paragraph. explain where it could be improved. then, in your own words, rewrite the paragraph to make its writing stronger. make sure you include a hook, supporting evidence, and a topic sentence. use correct spelling and grammar.
"growing flowers is one of my happiest childhood memories. gardening offers more than a way for kids to have fun. there are many things to gain from working with plants outside. it is unfortunate that many people feel too busy to garden. more people should take a chance with gardening to see what they can create."

Excerpt from saving the thrift store: a dramalee washington2rosa: eddie, i don’t recognize the shirt you’re wearing. when did you get it? 3louis: it doesn’t look as disheveled as the soccer shirts you wear all the time.4eddie: well, i’m not going to tiptoe through the soccer field to keep my clothes neat. (louis playfully aims a soccer ball at eddie. rosa deflects it.)5rosa: what i was trying to say is that the shirt looks really good. (louis wanders over to the morning newspaper that is still sitting on the front lawn. he leafs through it while eddie and rosa talk.) in line 5, which point is rosa making when she says eddie’s shirt looks good? a) the store must have new merchandise. b) rosa is jealous of eddie’s new shirt. c) eddie must have done his own laundry. d) eddie often wears old, tattered shirts.