There is tension being drawn in . The mother can sense it and sees the war between her and her daughter approaching, that’s why she mentions images of a war "In her bright helmet she looks at me as if across a great distance. Distant fires can be glimpsed in resin light of her eyes" she connecting her feelings with imagery of war. can you tell me if this is good or not.

It's great! I like the part where it says "Distant fires can be glimpsed in resin light of her eyes" but I think it could use a little spice around "and sees the war between her and her daughter approaching" but I'm not sure what to add.

Explanation:

.the definitions

.the number of syllables in the word

.the pronunciation of the word

.the parts of speech

.the foreign translations

the reason that neiterkob's daughter most likely tell the beginnings of the maasai is : to explain the readers the origin of maasai culture

with this explanation, the reader will grasp a better concept about it and not lost in the middle of reading.

                                            (hope this )