This is for English. How is it, and what should I change? I'm still not done. I just wanna take my life
But if God is alive
He won't approve so
What I gotta do is
Live my life in sadness
I'm never alone but I'm always depressed
And I don't know why
I don't know why
Why do I always wanna cry
Can somebody please tell me why
I made up a saying
And some might feel the same way
Sometimes it's better to alone and to feel lonely
Than to be surrounded and to feel alone
Let me feel alone on my f*ing own
I just wanna take my life
But if God is alive
He won't approve so
What I gotta do is
Live my life in sadness
I'm never alone but I'm always depressed
And I don't know why

Id change it to if God is real

and id change it to He wouldn’t let me

and then for the second time leave it as it is!

This song is so. SAD I can feel my tears Falling from my eyebrows

Explanation:

the illustration   that would give a reader a clear understanding of the text is a picture of men constructing the frame of a building.the frame is made of iron bars. the text describes the job of blacksmiths'. these were very organised and they had different names: "the driver" and "the heater". the text describes the way in which these men worked ; they worked iron pieces as if they were playing a sport. in fact, the text wants to show the men's skills. the text also puts some emphasis on the use of '' rivets'' in construction. this kind of nails were not always used in the construction of manhattan.

some examples:

"and with an underhand toss he hurled the smoking rivet straight at the catcher, who caught it in mid-air in his catching can." men's skills

"when the driver was ready for a new " the emphasis on the rivet ( special nail used in construction).

" it against a beam to remove any cinders, and jammed it into the waiting hole. " the emphasis on the rivet.