Is this a good poem/song stanza/verse ? I made it. Im in these distant moods

in an out of blues and im falling onto my shoes

everytime i think I'm in tune

and my head is pounding i thought i was going forward

i've went into reverse drowning

im digging my way back out

i still think my will is stout

i still think i can have a victory shout

if i keep marching if i keep my head in the air

and become a daisy living off the sun and the rain

I think I'll brave the weather because I'll grow into something better

That can withstand your ice and still hold together