ASAPPP I will mark brainliest who ever does the question first I only have a few minutes

Can you please edit this story by reflecting a deeper understanding of setting.

She looked lacking of energy
out on the front room window.
There he goes, she said to her
self and quickly turned away
from his sight she had been
dumped and dumped hard. He
told her he was in love with her
sister and they have been
seeing each other for weeks on the sly. Without seeming to tell a single soul.