What changes can I do in this paragraph?
I was walking home from work in a scary night. The weather was very scary; nothing less than a giant monster. Walking a bit further I was finally on the bus stop. After 10 minutes the bus were finally there. I went inside the bus, no one was there, without me and the bus driver. When going a bit further with the driver I felt unsafe. It seemed to be that the driver were full. The next bus stop was my destination, until the bus driver just ignored my destination and drove further. What I said was " excuse me my destination is behind us" the driver replied with "I know". And when the driver turned his face around I got shocked and couldn`t believe what I saw. …….

Here this should get you a bit more marks.

Explanation:

I was walking home from work in dark and gloomy night. The weather was very creepy; nothing less than a giant monster. Walking a bit further I was finally on the bus stop. After 10 minutes the bus were finally there. I went inside the bus, no one was there, just me and the bus driver. When going a bit further on the bus with the driver alone; I felt unsafe. It seemed to be that the driver was full. The next bus stop was my destination, until the bus driver just ignored my destination and drove further. What I said was "Excuse me my destination is behind us" but the driver replied with "I know". And when the driver turned his face around I got terrified and couldn`t believe what I was seeing...

I changed the saw to I was seeing because you are talking in present tense not paste tense.

elise is writing a literary analysis of a biographical essay about emily dickinson.

which of the following should elise use in order to provide a strong claim statement in the introduction to her analysis?

a.  

“a life apart” by julia golding maintains that emily dickenson wrote over a thousand poems during her life.

theres no poem include that