To improve the logic and flow of the essay, the writer
should revise sentence 5 by
read the passage
(1) i think that schools should switch from using paper
textbooks to using computer tablets, (2) textbooks were
effective in the pre-digital age, but now we live in a
technology-based society, so schools need to get with the
program and adopt a modern approach to learning, (3) in
fact, the chair of the federal communications commission
said that "it's time for the next stage" of learning with
tablets and pointed out how textbooks are often out of date.
(4) opponents argue that tablets aren't a good choice
because initially they're very expensive, (5) the secretary
of education pointed out that tablets can be updated
regularly, which saves money in the long run. (6) not to
mention the pluses of having the latest and greatest info!
(7) many experts agree that switching to tablets is
important for the future of education
a)replacing the word "money with the word "dough."
b)deleting the sentence to clarity the overall argument.
c)inserting the phrase "are awesomely fast atter "tablets"
to add personality
d)adding the transition "however at the beginning to
connect the ideas better