So i'm writing a poem to turn into lyrics for music class, and i was wondering if someone could read it, and give feedback and tips? in advance! : )
here's the poem:
you wake up every morning with tears in your eyes,
and every day you put on the same disguise,
filling your mind with decisions and lies.

you don’t know how long you can keep up this charade,
taking a part in this weird masquerade.

you try to drown your fears,
to make them disappear,
but maybe your fears can swim,
bobbing back up to mess it all up.

you feel you’ve already lost the race of decisions,
one after another, all those different visions.
you picture yourself with a reason for being,
but you still wish for a clear sense of seeing.

you try to drown your fears,
to make them disappear,
for they are no longer welcome here.
you no longer need the disguise behind your eyes,
twisting the kaleidoscope to make a sense of hope.